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All in a Day's Work

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It was a cold December night and an ominous silence was singing in the air. The two men were standing in an 8 feet deep pit, digging. One had a pickaxe and the other, a shovel.

Sometime later when the shovel struck the ground it made contact with a metal and produced a sharp sound, which echoed in the silent night. It was the sweetest sound they had ever heard, and both of them rejoiced like little kids.

“What do we do?” asked one.

“We take it and run of course,” replied the other.

“Not so soon, boys,” said a third voice.

The two men felt a pang in their heads. They dropped their tools, turned and looked up. A middle aged whiskered fellow in his khaki uniform was standing above them, smiling sarcastically.

“Not again,” one of the diggers muttered under his breath.

“How the hell did you know?” asked another, skimming the sweat off his face.

“Well, boys, let’s just say that robbing the robbers is all in a day’s work for me,” said the khaki clad sinister-looking man, grinning nefariously.


Chapter Zero

The Message


Shambhunath had dedicated his entire life to rob banks, people and houses. He had started off as a petty thief, and very soon grew to become one of the biggest and the most evasive robbers of the country. He was never caught. Now lying on his death bed, he called his five sons. They were robbers too.

Over the years he had amassed a lot of wealth, and now the time had come for him to make a decision. The sons were told a long time ago that only one of the five would get the entire property; the one that was better than the remaining four.

Every one of them had tried his level best to prove his mettle in the business of robbing. Everyone fared well, which only made it difficult for Shambhunath to decide on one.

Now, standing around the cot, the five sons were quite queasy.

The old man then did the unthinkable. Instead of naming the sole owner of the property, he gave each of them a slip of paper on which a message was written. A minute later, he took his last breath.

The message simply said:

Bob,

I know I’m going to die. Take care of my lucky cat.

Upon reading it, everyone, except the youngest, tore it and threw it away, for it didn’t make any sense to them, and thought that their father had gone crazy during his last days. One of them even vented out his anger: “His lucky cat died 5 years ago, and he wants us to take care of it now? And who the hell is Bob, anyway? Damn the old man.”

They couldn’t understand one bit of the message. None of them got the property, for they simply didn’t know where and what it was.

In spite of not knowing what the message said, the youngest son kept it. He was the only one who loved and respected his father very much.

Had Shambhunath made any family planning with his wife 26 years ago and decided not to conceive their 5th child, this story would have had no purpose at all. But now there is one. Ten years from now, the youngest son would be recruiting two young bright boys, and one of them would unfold the mystery of the last message given by the old man.


Chapter One

The Robbery


Most of them were sweating. It’s not that the AC wasn’t working, but the heat of tension had subjugated its cooling effect. None of them were in such a predicament before, for such a thing had never happened until then. They looked scared and helpless, but they didn’t look hopeful. They were almost convinced that the help wasn’t coming. The only two people that neither looked scared nor helpless were Jackie and Browny, because for them, hope lay in what was happening.

The job had to be done flawlessly. If anything went slightly wrong, they would end up in a big trouble and they very well knew it. They were inside the Bank of Bangalore – one of the most prestigious banks.

Everyone in the Bank was held at gun point, except for Jackie and Browny, because they were the ones who held the guns.

15 minutes later, having executed their job perfectly, they were out of the bank. But what surprised the manager of the bank was that they were interested in only one locker, which had a small package. Apart from that they hadn’t taken a single rupee.

Nevertheless, robbing, be it a bank, a person, or a house, was as easy as eating an apple, because for them, robbing was all in a day’s work.


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“Look, we don’t have anything to give you this time,” Jackie tried to explain.

“Oh, really? So what are you two doing in this graveyard in the middle of the night?” Inspector Singa demanded.

An owl hooted somewhere and a dog yelped. It was around three o’clock in the morning, and darkness had reigned supreme. The only thing that held the three men in light was a small torch.


Chapter Two

The Reward


Bhatuknath, the leader of the gang, was congratulating the young lads. They were recently recruited and had already shown a lot of talent.

“So tell me, Jackie. How did you find out?” he asked.

Jackie, an engineering college dropout, had unraveled the mystery of the message that Bhatuknath had got from his father ten years ago. He was carrying that slip of paper since then.

Jackie had tried to explain it the previous day, but in the heat of the moment, Bhatuknath had not understood it properly and given them a green signal to rob the bank.

“Well, boss, nothing is as it seems. Your father was not talking about his cat. If you look closely, some letters are italicized.”

Bhatuknath took out the slip of paper once again from his shirt pocket. He had observed the italicized letters of course, but was never able to find out their significance. He observed again, carefully.

The message said:

BOB,

I know I’m going to die. Take care of my lucky CAT.

“Yeah, I know. What about them?”

“The italicized letters are: knooecrl. Right? Now if you just re-arrange those letters you’ll get ‘locker no,’” explained Jackie.

The boss raised his eyebrows, leaned forward, and said, “Continue.”

“So now what’s the locker no? It’s CAT. It’s in capitals. See that? If you assign a number to each of the 26 alphabets in English, the value of CAT will be 3120. So it’s locker no. 3120.”

There was a heavy drop of silence for a few seconds, and then the boss exclaimed.

“Wow! Why didn’t I get it in all these years?! And the message was addressed to BOB, which of course is Bank of Bangalore. I thought Bob was a person.”

He then patted the backs of the young lads and said, “You will be generously rewarded, my boys.”


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Inspector Singa lit a cigarette and took a drag.

“As we told you, that bloody skunk kept the watch and gave us a mere Rs. 2200,” Browny said, taking out four 500 rupee notes and two 100 rupee notes.

“Fine. But what are you digging the ground for?”

“It’s nothing. Really.”

The inspector butted out his cigarette, jumped into the pit, took the shovel and struck the ground, which again produced a sound. He looked up and stared at the two men. Having demonstrated his animosity towards their lies, he got out of the pit.

“Well, are you going to say what this is is all about? Or do you wish to go to prison?”


Chapter Three

The Revelation


Jackie was maddened by the injustice done to him and Browny by their boss. The package they had stolen from the bank had only two things: a gold and diamond studded Patek Philippe watch with 18 complications, which was worth at least Rs. 30 lakhs. Apart from the watch there was Rs. 2200/-

Bhatuknath had kept the watch and given them Rs. 2200.

“Can’t even buy a decent pair of jeans with this,” Jackie hollered when they reached home. Browny didn’t try to appease him, as he very well knew it was not going to help.

Jackie couldn’t sleep and kept on cursing his boss, but something struck him at around one in the night. He woke Browny up.

“I think we have hit the jackpot.”

And when Jackie explained what he had found out, Browny shouted and screamed and danced and sang and clapped. That very moment they headed towards the grave yard – to dig through their way to riches.


Chapter Four

The Jackpot


Inspector Singa was one of the most corrupt police officers in the city. Word was out that two young men had robbed the bank early in the morning. When he went to the bank and asked around, it became clear to him that the robbers were Jackie and Browny. He had a history with them. In fact he had a history with every robber in the city. He never caught them, and they never forgot to pay him.

Since the moment he had found out, he had placed a constable near their house. When the constable called him up and said that they were headed somewhere in the middle of the night, he had asked him to follow. And now he had them.

“I’m pretty sure that our boss’s father’s property is hidden here,” Jackie was saying.

“How can you say that?”

“Because the old man not only wanted his able son to get hold of that costly watch, but also the money,” he said.

“Which money? You said that there was only Rs. 2200,” the inspector looked befuddled. A moment later he realized that Jackie was talking about the same money.

“I don’t understand,” said the inspector.

Then Browny gave the money to the inspector.

“An address is hidden there – address to here. This graveyard. This very grave,” said Jackie, stamping his foot on the ground. The inspector crinkled his eyes.

“Hold these 500 rupee notes, and tell me what is NOT common between them.”

“Serial numbers?” asked the inspector.

“Damn right, you are. Serial numbers. I was a bit perplexed in the beginning. Why would the old man keep just Rs. 2200 in a locker? That too 6 mutilated notes! Then it got me thinking. Serial numbers!”

Jackie paused for a moment and then continued.

“The serial numbers of 500 rupee notes are RST 030821, YST 011404, 4ST 180308 and 1ST 180523. Observe something?”

The inspector shook his head.

Jackie continued. “Leave the series and observe only the numbers. Assign a letter of English to the first two numbers in each serial number. 03=C, 08=H, and 21=U. Next, 01=A, 14=N, 04=D. Then, 18=R, 03=C, 08=H. And finally, 18=R, 05=E, and 23=W. So, it’s CHU, AND, RCH, and REW. This is the order in which I held the notes. They didn’t make any sense to me then, but later on when I re-arranged them, I got “ANDREW CHURCH.”

“Go on,” said the inspector.

“Well, now observe the series. All the notes have the series ST. So, it has to be St. Andrew’s Church. Now which church exactly? There could be more than one. Now notice the very first letter or alphabet of the series: R, Y, 4 and 1. 1 and 4 give the values A and D. Again re-arrange the letters and you’ll get YARD. Graveyard! This is the only St. Andrew’s Church in the city, which has a graveyard.”

Silence reigned supreme again. None of the three spoke for the next few seconds.

“Phew! That’s some analysis. But how did you find out the exact grave?” asked the inspector.

“Look at those two 100 rupee notes. 0MN 101505 and 0MN 720096. They say MN JOE, 1972-1996. The first digit of the series, which is 0, has no value of course,” Jackie finished explaining.

This was too much for the inspector to digest.

A minute later they picked up their shovel and pickaxe again, and dug until it became easier for them to lift the big metal box, which was buried for ten years or more.

Everyone took a deep breath and broke open the lock of the box.

“Let’s do it,” said Jackie, and lifted the lid.


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They were staring at the contents in mute amazement. There were two other small boxes. And when Jackie opened them, their hearts skipped a beat. It took them almost 2 minutes to recuperate.

“How much is it worth?” asked Browny, not taking his eyes off the contents.

“Minimum 30,” said the inspector.

“Lakhs?” asked Browny innocently.

The inspector shook his head vigorously and said, “Crores, you moron.”

Finally, they decided to split it. The inspector demanded 50% of the share and got it. Jackie and Browny argued in the beginning, but they later agreed as they didn’t want to go to prison.

"Now, take your share and run as if you’ve never run before. And remember. Never come back,” said the inspector, packing his ‘precious’ little black bag.

Inspector Singa then turned and wended his way out of the graveyard.

“Damn it, man. Why the hell should he get so much?” Browny was enraged.

“Keep still. We’ll figure out something soon.”


Chapter Five

The Setup


A few days later, inspector Singa’s house was robbed. Nothing was taken, except a little black bag. The robbers perfectly knew about the bag’s whereabouts, because they had dealt with him many times in the past and knew how to think like him. And moreover, robbing, as mentioned earlier, was all in a day’s work for them.

The inspector felt a raging thirst to kill the robbers. His ‘precious’ little black bag was gone. But what he didn’t know then was that it was just the beginning.

The next day, LokAyukta, the anti-government corruption organization of Karnataka, raided Inspector Singa’s house. To his shock, the officials knew exactly where to search. They went straight to the bathroom, and pulled open the top shelf. And there it was; a small messenger bag, and in it were 20 lakh rupees in cash, a few biscuits of solid gold, and 2 small diamond stones. He was aghast. He hadn’t kept it. But he knew who had set him up.

A week later he was given a permanent leave from his job.


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Exactly one month later, Singa received an anonymous letter. It read:

Dear Singa,

In spite of all the dirty things you’ve done, we still think you deserve something.

So, here’s the code: 84748 843 7263 47283 24246.

Decipher it and get your share. Good luck!

P.S. If you don’t take it within 6 months from today, we’ll retrieve it back.

Yours sincerely,

JB


Chapter Last

All in a day’s work


Robbing the robbers could be all in a day’s work for Singa, but using his brain wasn’t. He tried the old fashioned way by assigning letters to alphabets, but little did he know that the code was entirely different. He never deciphered it. Hence he never got his share.

What happened to Jackie and Browny after this? Well, let's just say that they happily lived ever after. Apart from robbing, enjoying the luxuries of life also became all in a day's work for them.



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Comments (91)

Oh My Gosh!!! That was some story! Wonderfully written, good plot and nicely weaved together... Just one thing, at places, it seemed that the difficult codes are getting bit too easily deciphered by the robbers ;-P

I myself couldn't participate this time, due to work pressure... All the best to you :-)

wow...visit the same grave again...excellent...

oops...:P

sorry, deciphering the codes is what i do in my job description...:D

Loved the code

Cheers,
Ravan

Wow..amazing ...superb..I am wondering how you get such fabulous ideas ...Amazing plot beautifully written ...Hats off to your story..The most interesting thing was unraveling of the mystery with the symbolic codes ..Its really amazing ...I found this as your best piece ..Great work dude :)

Am I the first to comment or there are a lot of comments waiting to be moderated?? In any case I'm happy I'm commenting on a super write-up of a budding fictional novelist!! I mean every word of it!! You better not waste your talent away!! No matter however long the post might seem, you know how to keep the readers gripped to the post from GO to FINISH!! Awesome Karthik! Singa seems like a majority of the "Vardiwallahs"(POLICE) in our country! Dumb @$$! Sheer case of hunter becomes the hunted!! Keep the good work alive!

PS: Need your autograph yaar...Just in case you become a famous author, you might not be accessible...that's why I'm asking :)

Awesome story dude! I'm voting for you!

I guess you'll be invited to write the script for the next Oceans Movie!

Gr8 story. All the best

Whoa...Now that's one helluva post!!Engineer dropouts kya kya kar sakte hain...wow..m amazed!!
N u r so good at fiction mann...!!Was in a hurry..so I thought I won't be able to complete it in one go...but once I began, there was no stopping mee..!!
Keep writing...and if u ever write a book..book one copy for me with ur autograph on it...Baad me to bade log ho jaoge!!

That was some story Karthik !

I am amazed at how well you kept all the pieces together.

Good one .

@ debosmita
Thank you so much, debosmita. :-)
It's a story, isn't it? So anything can happen. :D
Though they are robbers, they are not illiterates. They are quite smart.
And you are not writing this time? Damn! I'm really going to miss your writing. :-(
Glad you liked the story. Thanks again. :-)

@ Ravan
Hey, Sid. It's not fair, man. Not fair. Yours is only the second comment, and blew it?! :-(
On the contrary, I take it as a compliment. I really do.
Hope you liked the story. :-)

@ adreamygal
Thanks a lot, buddy. I don't know how I get the plots, but I'm just glad my blog buddies are liking them.
Glad you enjoyed reading. Thanks again. :-)

@ Raksha
That was one hell of a compliment, Raksha. Phew! I'm already flying in the air. :D
I hope I'll write a novel someday.
And autograph, did you say? Whoa!!
Hey don't let these things get to my head, yar. Still have a long way to go.
I'm really glad you liked the story. Thank you sooooooooo much! :-)

@ Saurabh
Hey, thanks man. I appreciate it. And I'm happy you liked it.
Next Ocean's movie, did you say? Gimme a call sometime. We'll discuss which heroines to cast in the movie. :D

@ Rhythm
Such hearty compliments!! Hope I deserve them.
You know, one thing that made me extremely happy is the fact that it made you read completely at one go even though you were busy. This is what I really try hard to achieve - PACE.
Baad mein toh bade log ho jaoge?? That will never happen, dear. Hope I'll write a novel someday, and hope you'll read it.
Thanks a million, girl! :-)

@ Madhu
Thank you very much, sir.
I'm glad you felt that nothing was out of place.

Superb story Karthik, very well written, enjoyed reading it a lot. You sure have a talent to write :)

@ Karthik

Fan of Jeffrey Archer, it was quite easy for to expect the suspense and pleasure together!
Great justice given to each chapter.

And each chapter did sync at the end! You are very creative and have a strong gripe over your fictions. May you enhance more at your skills
:)

Keep the spark Alive..

Oh boy~ That was some story..awesome...I remembered all those detective short stories we used to read in childhood.
Very well written....You should probably write something much more elaborate and think of publishing :)))

brilliant dude... thats the only word for it. Didnt take my attention away for even a second. Very well narated and lovely plot.

Keep Blogging!
Cheers!
Tavish

Following you...

Wow! That was some story! You are quite a storyteller...

@ Harsha
Thanks a lot, Harsha. Glad you liked it.

@ Rachana
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined
Hey, that was a sweet wishing. Thank you so much.
I'm happy you enjoyed reading it. Keep visiting. :-)

@ dilontherocks
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
Oh, man, you made my day. Really. It made you remember the detective stories?
Right now, I'm just in the practicing mode of writing. Hope I'll write something big someday.
Thank you so much. Keep visiting. :-)

@ Tavish
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
Did you say brilliant? Wow, man! I'm honoured. Thanks a million. Glad you enjoyed it. Keep visiting.

@ Roshmi
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
Thank you so much. Glad to know you liked it. And thanks for following. :-)

Well Karthik...You sure have a long way to go..but don't forget that there are people to keep reminding you of your potential..not that you are unaware of it but its always nice to hear it from others :)I'm confident it'll never make you head heavy ;) Good luck or should I say, "A very safe and pleasant journey ahead!" so that that the long way doesn't seem too long :)

I gotta say, you are very good at weaving words. This post was very innovative. It was a nice read.

that was really something...
u did sew it up beautifuly..
brilliant!!

Oh wow! An amazing tale. Very captivating...
Interesting to know about a day in the life of a Robber!! :D

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Whoa!! What a story!! Surely, penning down such mystery filled story is all in your days work :)

Wonderfully written my friend... All the best to you :)

Wow! what a story!..and all in the day's work?..u write it so well, enjoyed reading it!!!
:)

@ Raksha
Hey Raksha, that was really nice of you to say. I'm elated. Words of wisdom, I should say.
Thank you so much. I agree with you totally. Comments I get here really help in building up my confidence level.
As of now, my feet are firmly on the ground, and I think I'll stay like this forever. Thanks for showing confidence in me. That was really very encouraging. :-)

@ Nethra
Thank you so much, Nethra. Glad you liked it.

@ Sorcy
Thanks, dude. I'm happy you enjoyed reading it.

@ Shilpa
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
Thanks a lot, Shilpa. Glad you enjoyed it. By the way, I took the topic idiomatically, and not literally. It just so happens that the major events in the story unfold on the same day.
Thanks again. Keep visiting. :-)

@ Anamika
Thanks! Will contact you soon.

@ Rohini
First of all I'm a bit disappointed in you for not participating. :-( I'd voted for you last time. Thought you'd come up with another masterpiece this time. Missed your writing really. :-( Guess you were busy.

Thank you so very much. That was very encouraging. I'm really happy you enjoyed reading it.
It's all in a day's work for me? ha ha..:P I've run out of plots already. Hope I'll get one soon.
Thanks again. :-)

@ Pushpee
That was a nice compliment. Thanks a bunch. Glad you enjoyed reading it. Keep visiting. :-)

btw, wud u be interested in link exchange? i have already blogrolled you. and you will remain blogrolled at my blog :)

Hey!! Superb swriting. i was hooked till the end!! you really have the gift! it was like i m reading a seasoned thriller writer!!!!

:D three cheers !!

What a story, straight like a movie. Thanks for the happy ending. I dont like tragic endings...

Hi Karthik.

That was one hell of a story. It could have been a pocket book in itself. Is this the only genre that you are interested in or do you write all manner of stories? Budding novelist indeed.

Good luck and great work!

SUPERB!!! AWESOME!!!
A great plot.. a great narration... kept me on the edge of my seat through the entire thing...
I WANT MORE!!!!
thats how i felt... why dont you start a jackie browny series... and then publish??
keep writing...

Wow wow! an intellectual fictional post I must say and you excelled it. Felt like I was reading a Robert Ludlum novel :)

That was really a very gripping story that I have read in blogs in a long time.... all the comments above are something to prove its quality very nice....

@ Chhaya
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
Thank you so much, Chhaya. I'm elated. That was a wonderful compliment. :-)
I'm already following your blog. Will also blogroll you now.
Thanks again. :-)

@ Insignia
Hey thank you so much. It was like a movie? I'm very glad. Hope it was pacy as well.
And I too don't like tragic endings. :-)

@ Shalini
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
Thanks a million, Shalini. I'm happy you liked it so much. :-)
I'm interested in all genres, except mindless love stories. :P
I've written 8 short stories on my blog till now. If you have time, kindly go through them. You'll know the variety.
Thanks again. Keep visiting. :-)

@ Tanmaya
Well, what more can I ask for? A person who's reading fiction since her primary school days is giving me such a huge compliment. I do have some talent then, eh? :-)
And you just gave me a nice idea, yar. Jackie-Browny series! Will think about it for sure. Thanks a million.:-)

@ Aditya
Thank you so much, Aditya. It means a lot to me.
And did you say Robert Ludlum? Damn! That was a tremendous compliment. Glad you liked it. :-)

@ Dhiman
Thanks a lot, Dhiman. It gives me immense pleasure to know that you enjoyed so much.
Keep visiting!

Karthik, boy o' boy!
Whatta story is this!! Truly awesome!! U write good fictions! Damn nice :)
Cheerios boy!

stupendous and wonderful story....
Intelligent writing with perfect plot...
simply superb and captivating

Awesome.. this was such a gripping story.. amazing plot, great wriitng.. I am totally smitten by the tale..

now the happy endings always brings a glee!

Amazzzzzing!!! Amazzzing!!
Really Loved the Poem!!!!

What a great story. Couldn't stop reading till I got to the end!

typical indian style..of happy endings....

still ..nice story...

Keep it up!

@ Shruti
Thanks a lot, Shruti. I'm glad you liked it. Keep visiting. :-)

@ Mahesh
Thank you so much, Mahesh. Really appreciate the comment. I'm happy to know that you enjoyed the story. Keep visiting. :-)

@ Annyesha
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
Thanks a bunch, Annyesha. That was a pleasant compliment. I'm so glad you liked it. Keep visiting. :-)


@ Hary
Same here, Hary. I don't like tragic endings too. Happy endings always bring smiles. :-)

@ Niharika
Poem?? What poem, Niharika? I'm confused.

@ Dreamer
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
That's very nice to know. Pace is one thing I try hard to bring in my stories. Hope I've achieved my purpose. Thank you so much. Keep visiting. :-)

@ Makk
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
Well, it's a story with dark humour. So happy ending suited fine. Thanks for the comment. I really appreciate it. Keep visiting. :-)

boy o boy!!
u hav done it again :)

seriously, after the conan doyle's human codes and dictionary codes (or was it bible? the code used a book for encoding), I find this one the best and most innovative...
very very good thinking man...

everyone else has already written all the compliments i want to say...
all i can say is, u should try to get ur blogposts also.. may be titled short-story series... it is worth it!! novels can wait.. :D

keep them coming man... :)

am trying to write my own short-story... but not able to do it.. :( :(

Yes, Robert Ludlum is my favorite author :)

Hey! That was a brilliant one :)
Felt the writing style was some what similar to Hunch story.

Kept me hooked till the last word :)
I was wondering what the the last code meant :D....Thanks to the 2nd commentator :)

Loved it :)
Kudos!

Sivarchana

You know what, I started out from Post 1 on BAT, and your's was the 26th one! It took so long to get here, but it was absolutely worth the wait! Very well conceived plot, and you managed to hold it till the end..:)
Your blog itself is quite interesting..I was looking at the books you have in your Library, its almost similar to what I have!
Will come back and read all your posts!
Preeti

@ Sundeep
Thanks a million, Sundeep. That was one helluva compliment. I'm so intoxicated. :-)

Actually I haven't read any of Conon Doyle's books. Not even Sherlock Holmes. But now I guess I'll soon pick them up.

And publishing blogposts is a nice idea, but I haven't yet written that much to make it into a book. On the contrary, once something is published on a platform, I wonder whether anyone would want to publish again - on paper. Let's see.

By the way, I'm very eager to read your short story, man. You've been saying it since a few weeks now. Execute it as soon as possible. Or for the time being, update your blog.

Once again, thank you. I'm really glad you liked it so much. :-)

@ Aditya
Same here, Aditya. I like Robert Ludlum more than Dan Brown. Glad to know that we share the same taste. :)

@ Archana
I'm happy you liked the story.
As far as the narrative is concerned, it was quite similar to Hunch. You are right. But this time, unlike Hunch, the story oscillates between past, present and the future. Good observation. :-)
By the way, now that you know what the code says, do you know how? :-)
Thanks again, Archana. :-)

@ Preeti
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
That was a marvellous compliment, Preeti. Thank you so much. I'm so glad to know that you enjoyed reading. :-)
And you have read almost the same books as I have? That's really great to know that we share the same taste. :-)
Thanks again. My older posts are waiting to be read by you. I'm sure you won't be disappointed. :-)

What an awesome story!!..the plot, the codes, everything...! The suspense was maintained throughout the story, very well done..just one thing, I thought you wanted to portray the youngest son as a good person, but he turned out to be a miser and greedy...was that intentional?

really good ... awesome writeup .... long but every line was worth it ...
one curiosity : did u write this n later squeezed in " all in a day's work" phrases ??? or was it specially for this only ??

wow karthik, that was some story, and what a narration! though it was a long post, but i read it all in one go :)) too good...all the best for blog a ton..

PS: btw, when u contacting Anamika Dutta? I am at least not gonna contact her, as I wanna see ur interview thr :P

HOW????????
You aroused my curiosty now! And I Know I will never be able to know how you coded!
I know you will tell me that soon ;~)

@ Umesh
Thanks a lot, Umesh. That was very encouraging. I'm glad you liked it.
Well, I didn't want to portray anyone as a good person, let alone the youngest son. He just loved and respected his father, that's all.
Thanks again.

@ Naveen
Thank you so much, dude. I'm happy you liked it.
Now that was a smart question.
Well, the answer is: both yes and no. Two weeks ago, I got this vague idea about the serial numbers of currency notes. But didn't know how to execute it. Once blog-a-ton announced the topic, the story started taking shape in my head clearly - line by line, chapter by chapter. So I guess it was mostly for the contest.

@ Neha
Thanks a million, Neha. So good to know you enjoyed reading it. You made my day. :))

And I contacted Anamika two days back. In return, she sent me a questionnaire. I completed it yesterday and sent it back. Don't know when they are gonna publish it. Will certainly provide the link to you once that happens.
I didn't really think anyone would be interested in reading my interview. Thanks for showing interest in it. I really appreciate it. :)

@ Archana
How? Well, I'm not gonna say that. Never. :P
It's quite easy. Try it. I'm sure it'll be interesting. :)

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Hi Friend ur doing an excellent work.. Can we exchange links...

Man Man Man.....! What do i say... Thats hell of an analysis to put up such a plot...its a fantabulous concept. I am sure it can be used in some thriller novel, if and only if you are planning to write it.

One thing that i like most about your stories are, teh reader is hooked for whole post which is obviously what a writer expects from his writing.

Very very nice concept :)

Cheers
Mahesh

Congrats man! You are the runner-up. I'm still on for the oceans movie... You may start 'couch-casting' the gals you want!

Hey Karthik! First time at your blog and loved the very first post I read. You did a great job in making a groping mystery out of this simple phrase - "All in a days work."
Never imagined that it could take such a turn. you also have a nice narrative style. Looking forward to more interesting reads on your blog.

Also I am sorry for the delay in replying to your comments on my blog.Thanks for dropping in.

The jigsaw puzzle was solved cleverly without confusing the reader. Great piece of writing, Karthik. Glad I got to visit your blog :)
btw any plans of writing a book?:)

@ Mahesh
Thanks a lot, Mahesh. That was a wonderful compliment. I realize how much you love stories, and now knowing that this story of mine impressed you feels great.
As you mentioned, pace is one thing I give very much importance to. If it kept you hooked till the end, then I guess I've done quite a job.
Thanks again. :)

@ Saurabh
Thanks, man. :)
Sure we'll do an Ocean's. As for the heroines, plenty of options there. I'll decide soon and draw up a list. We'll then 'work' on them. ;)

@ grace
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
Thanks a lot, grace. Coming from a great narrator like yourself, it is a great compliment.
I'm really glad you liked it. And yes. Lots more to come. :)

And don't worry about not replying to my comments soon. I'm sure you were busy. Chillax! :)

@ Shruthi
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
Thanks a lot, Shruthi. I'm happy you liked it. :)
And the book! Well, I still have a long way to go before I start writing my first novel. So let me practice writing for some more time. :)
Thanks again. Aagaga barta iri. :)

Hey, u were almost there... but congrats nonetheless :-)

Thank you so much, yar. It was a wonderful experience, anyway. I had one hell of a fun writing this story. :)

Runner up??

Congratulations boy!! Next time you are gonna win..No doubt!
:)

Wow!! Tell me, how long did you take to plot it up and write this ?!

@ Archana
Thank you. Let's see. :)

@ Quirky
Welcome to Eloquence Redefined, Ms. Lovely Eyes.
Well, I don't mean to be modest, but really it wasn't a complicated plot. When you know the answer, it's not that difficult to frame the question, is it?
Slept over the idea for a day, and wrote it the next day. So two days.
Hope you enjoyed reading. Keep visiting. :)

BRAVO!
Great Work, Karthik.

The plot is really amazing and the suspense is kept till the end.
A very interesting style of narration. And I'd have to say it is on helluva mystery story. The flow of words and the phrases and the narration is impeccable. I don't think this story can be told in a better way.
The way you have written this story - It has inspired me to write more. Very much commendable. Very much inspiring.

Thank you so much, Vikram. Coming from a great narrator like yourself, it means a lot to me. You really made my day.
And yeah, looking forward to read more stories on your blog. Please write more.
Thanks again.

Excellent piece of fiction!!

You did a marvelous job at this intellectual thriller mystery.

Loved the way you solved it all using fantastic codes.

Keep up the good work.

Cheers!!

Thank you so much. I'm really glad you liked it. That was very encouraging. Keep visiting.

Nice story with a nice plot. :)

Best wishes.

Thanks a lot. Keep visiting. :)

Karthik,
It's been long overdue to visit this site. And I am really kicking myself for not having turned up earlier (and losing a nice follower ;-) however, that is not the reason I am here).

This is so brilliantly done! Your positioning of paragraphs, retention of suspense, lucid narration, appropriate dialogue all made this post very gripping. I scrolled down the post and scowled, wondering how was I going to read it in one go. But, the storyline got me so hooked that I couldn't tear myself away from my laptop screen before I had finished reading the last word.

This is truly inspiring for me! All the best for all your future works as well. If this is the quality you bring to your readers, I am sure all of us are going to be enthralled for a long time come.

Hey Vittal, no need for big words, man. I really wanted you here, for I admire your write-ups very much. But unfortunately I saw you everywhere, except here. So thought you were not interested and decided to stay away. Never mind.

Welcome to Eloquence Redefined.
That was really a wonderful compliment. Coming from you it feels like heaven. Pace is one thing I really try hard to achieve, and I'm glad it didn't bore you. Thanks a million. Will try my best to keep up with this.
And if you find loop holes of any kind, please don't hesitate to tell me.
Thanks again. Great to have you here. Cheerios!

No one, absolutely no one asked about deciphering the last code?? What is it? Or do I have to try and decipher it myself?? :P

Oh, Guria, you spoke my heart out. I was utterly disappointed when no one asked about it. :(
Thank you so much for noticing it. :)
And try deciphering it once. I shall tell you if you don't get it. :)

dude.... awesome story must tell yo.... awesome narration too....

I am not going to be original this time, so all I am going to say that your blog rocks, sad that I don't have suck a writing skills

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